First Draft of Script

Evaluation of Screen Reading of my 'Scribble Script'

- The dialogue in my sequel scene does not move the story on as fluently as it could, it is more of a conversation. Only a few of the lines of dialogue are effective to moving the story forward

- My dialogue conveys the relationship between the two characters well because it shows Kevin's submissive nature towards the guard and how the guard no longer has any fear for Kevin

- My dialogue does not communicate the Macro from my textual analysis very well as the both of the two characters in my scene are now adults, however through the stage directions we see that Kevin is resorting back to his old childlike ways supporting the conclusion i made in my textual analysis essay that some people are born evil and will always revert back to it whatever situation they are placed in

- I need to improve the amount of dialogue in my script. i will do this by adding more in to link it to my macro study better and to convey more of the story rather than some of the seemingly pointless time filling conversation my scene has at the moment

- I felt that the dialogue i did use however suited my characters well in the ways in which they would speak, the guard as an everyday male and Kevin as a submissive teenager